Angel Edits - Blog

Knight is verbose.
If you exchange 'Master' and 'Kitten' for 'Daddy' and 'Baby' it reads much better. I did however, LOVE, the belt scene birthday present. Nice.

I really loved Anya's back story here. The description of her aunt was exactly my mom, my childhood, so I related to her feelings of life sucks but try to make it better anyway. I really liked his attitude of hey, you deserve happy. Reminds me of my husband. My life was very sad before he brought me joy beyond anything I ever dreamed of.

The typos are distracting. Putting penis instead finger? Come on! Putting 'I' instead of 'He', totally confusing.

Her inner monolog was very hard to read, long drawn out thought, with the real point at the end, instead of the beginning. It gets better second half. Much too much description of furniture and clothes.

Worth the read for the belt scene I think.