This is a four star read, minus one star for its unreadability.
The grammar makes me want to 'ripe my hairs out with my bear hand'.
Its a good story too, its weird to see the errors.
I'm sure 'there are a goods reason' for the mistakes.
Its almost like a talented musician who cant read music. The story is fabulous, continuity, angst, progression; all good.
But the grammar 'was' the 'worse'. She 'defiantly' needs some help.
Free editing by angela...just let me know, totally willing to help.